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Grammar.
Grammar.
I fear for the world today.
A world in which, 'Where you at?'
Constitutes as a question.
Every day,
'I did good.'
'None of them work.'
Pass unnoticed.
Good people,
You have been fooled.
'Where are you?' will suffice.
'I did well.' Is nice.
'None of them works.' Is lovely.
So, my gentle snowflakes,
Perhaps I love grammar a little too much,
And perhaps I'm just exacerbating things,
But damn it,
A world without grammar,
Is chaos.
SWEET BABY RASSILON. It's a poem. I know. Crazy.
Just found this while I was organizing my files. I wrote it for grade 12 creative writing class in High School. Thought it might be worth a share.
Oh, and it's meant to be spoken word.
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:iconmonstermanga1022:
monstermanga1022 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist

This made me think of something I saw...

one little error turns "Let's eat, Grandma!" into "Let's eat Grandma!"

oh the horror of little kids eating granny cuz of an author's idiotic blunder of not seeing this simple mistake himself... lol

irony is the third line :)

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lovegoodproject Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I SECOND YOUR POET MOMENT
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:icondisneyphan01:
DisneyPhan01 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*is slightly ashamed she didn't know that "none of them work" was poor grammar* :B Oops.
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Not many people know that one. It's okay. :P
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:icondisneyphan01:
DisneyPhan01 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's not too bad, then. At least I know now! XD
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:iconlilarcher:
lilarcher Featured By Owner May 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Finally-- someone else in the world who cares.
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:iconoccamsrayzor:
OccamsRayzor Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A light in the darkness! Just when I fear there is no hope for the future.
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88pixiegirl88 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
AGREED.

Although, I have to tell you, you also won me over by saying "SWEET BABY RASSILON". XD
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FrancesLane Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Wow, I learned something! I never really thought about the fact that "none" is simply a contraction of "not one" and therefore must be treated as a singular. And I call myself a Grammar Nazi.

I am going to forward this to my English teacher. She is sure to get a laugh out of it.
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:icongecko-nuzlockes:
GECKO-Nuzlockes Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
THANK YOU!! i hate improper grammar!! aah, it's refreshing to know i'm not the only grammar freak out there XD (and i mean that in the best possible way)
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And yet, thrice, you've failed to type a capital 'I'.
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:iconatlantihero-kyoxei:
Atlantihero-Kyoxei Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012   Digital Artist
THRICE! YOU SAID THRICE! =D
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:icongecko-nuzlockes:
GECKO-Nuzlockes Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah. well, I was typing fast. I didn't think it mattered.
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:iconfranceslane:
FrancesLane Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
That, me dear, is a terrible mistake. Of COURSE it matters! Always and forever.
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:iconqwenbryla:
Qwenbryla Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
O_O I completely agree. My grammar isn't the best in the world, I admit, but "Where you at" and "I did good", for examples, really annoy me.
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SnowOutsideMyWindow Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is the most beautiful poem I have ever read before in my life... it's just so perfect. Damn it, it's making me cry.
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sonnydey Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
or maybe a new language is evolving making a newer, more precise and more simple version of english arise from modern day laziness. Either way I happened to enjoy this poem.
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Tinyfeather Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i like this poem. :D <3
but i noticed something..
"'None of them works.' Is lovely."
here, "none" is a plural noun as it refers to all of "them", so "work" would be correct, wouldn't it?
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No, because 'none' here is just a contraction of 'not one' and you can't say 'not one of them work'.
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thatwasagreatname Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2010
This is very nicely done. Great use of the word "exacerbate," too. So few people use real, descriptive words nowadays.
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:iconautumncrow:
AutumnCrow Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
Very nice poem. Hooray for not learning our speech from dumbed down comedic movies.
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:iconstevecook23:
stevecook23 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010
This is awesomecake. Do you mind if I take this in to the school I work at to show to people :D?
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No, not at all! XD
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:iconchocolateapollo115:
chocolateapollo115 Featured By Owner May 9, 2010
oh god yes<3
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:iconsiril:
Siril Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2010
I like your poem a lot!

Guess someone probably said it already, but language is always changing and grammar rules also change especially with dialects and sociolects. Some people tend to use certain structures when they are around their peer group, but speak differently when with their parents etc. ...

Being German and teaching it, I often find myself confronted with students saying "German has too much grammar" ;)
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melovebeanpole Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010
:worship:

somebody UNDERSTANDS!!!!!!!
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:iconsquinff:
Squinff Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010
I love this poem. May I send it to my old english teacher?
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sure!
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:iconsquinff:
Squinff Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010
Thanks!
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:iconleaviel:
Leaviel Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
I AGREE!!!!!
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:iconadiscrow:
AdisCrow Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Great poem. I usually wouldn't mention it, but the nature of the thing prompts me. Shouldn't it be, "'Where you at?'
Constitutes a question."?
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frenchw1nter Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010  Student General Artist
Nice. And I'm like, the Spelling, Grammar, Syntax and Punctuation Nazi, sooo... :P
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Living-dead-in-mi Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
Oh, My grammar and spelling are terrible, and I'm a writter, how bad is that? But I try and write the way I talk, commas are short pauses, periods. Are. Long. Pauses. It's not right but it keeps the emphasis where I want it. I'm guilty of finding lolspeak an adorable way of not being serious, like this poem. ;)
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Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
XD Have to agree with you on the punctuation thing. I'm a big fan of commas being used incorrectly for effect. And lolspeak DOES have its place in humour.
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Living-dead-in-mi Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
I just have trouble knowing when to use formal grammar and when to use what I write in. Trista was editing a paper for me and she was having a hard time because of all the sentance fragments. :doh:
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Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have that problem, but a few years ago I figured, screw it. I wrote all my english essays in school in a really casual this-is-how-I-speak way, and I got stupidly good marks. It was hilarious, my teacher hated that I was so good and breaking all the rules.
"Now class, don't EVER EVER do this, but here's an example of a good essay."
LOL Wish I could find that essay now...
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:iconliving-dead-in-mi:
Living-dead-in-mi Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
Ha! Yeah, I had a few essays like that. I couldn't even start to count them. :) It's weird how, if you're good at it, you get praised for breaking the rules. :P
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's the only thing that got me through High School. Barely. XD
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:iconliving-dead-in-mi:
Living-dead-in-mi Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010
It's keeping me through uni. Bearly.
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:iconangel-with-a-flower:
Angel-with-a-Flower Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
Amen! :D
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:iconcharspurplepants:
CharsPurplePants Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
You are amazing! I feel the exact same way! In fact, I always correct my friends when they say "I did good" or use text talk! :)
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:iconarcalian:
Arcalian Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
And let's not forget "Hukt on phoniks werks fer me!"
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:iconwindestaenzerin:
Windestaenzerin Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Language evolves and maybe this is how it's changing now.
Although it might as well be regressing ;)

When the english of native speakers is worse than of those who learned it as a foreign language they should really start worrying. :shrug:

There's a german book, a collection of photos showing really bad grammar/spelling mistakes in newspapers, on sign-boards etc. It's quite funny (although a lot of mistakes were basically the same - like wrong use of apostrophes)
I don't know if there's something alike in english.
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tomato-bird Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Student
Whatever happened to the English language! It's also frustrating how some people don't know the difference between "your" and "you're", "there" "their" and "they're".
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:iconkarlarei2003:
karlarei2003 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Was that a little L. Black I see in your poem there?
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Just a bit yeah. :)
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karlarei2003 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
I love that man.

His books are fabulous. Especially, if you get the audio books. He reads them X3
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:icongirl-on-the-moon:
Girl-on-the-Moon Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OMGYEY. I gotta check those out.
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:iconkarlarei2003:
karlarei2003 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
They're great on their own but there's nothing like hearing him tell his own story...in his own 'special' way XD
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CSIllustrator Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
"Sweet Baby Rassilon", man I love that :XD:

But so true. Thank you for writing this!!!!!
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